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He saw her as a fire
Dancing like the autumn trees
A wild bird she was
Flying on the ocean breeze

He could hear her laughing
Her hair unbound as rivers
She was a lovely sound
The freedom gave him shivers

He could feel her breathing
Spinning on the frozen beach
Rhythms through chilly air
Sometimes only she could reach

He taught her how to love
She taught what it meant to fly
And on the sand they shone
Like stars in the midnight sky
It took me a surprisingly and frustratingly long time to write this. It's for :iconknownames:'s contest, in which a poem must be written with the line they shone like stars in the midnight sky included. My Love by Sia somewhat inspired this.

I'VE OPENED POETRY POINT COMMISSIONS. If you would like more information, see my journal.

(c) :iconredserenite:

As with any of my works, my written permission is required if you are to use it in any way.
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OniOfTheShade Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2012   General Artist
love this.. it reminds me of someone very special to me. She inspired this story i'm working on, and this poem fits it so well.
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wei-en Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2012
Thank you!
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OniOfTheShade Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2012   General Artist
you're very welcome!
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amazinglyashlynn13 Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
this was really pretty and well written. Bravo X3
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wei-en Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2011
Thank you very much :)
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amazinglyashlynn13 Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
You are most welcome :3
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xMimameidx Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, this is really great! Nice flow and imagery. Very well done. :)
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wei-en Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2011
Thank you :)
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InTheStarryNightSky Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2011
A lovely piece. I really like the rhythm.

Good luck in the contest!
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wei-en Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2011
Thank you!
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